I had a list of things I felt were necessary for Arthur's dialogue in this comic beyond giving his impression of Edward:

• Make clear that this is specific to Edward, and not a general statement about parents everywhere.
  
  
• Acknowledge the potential to be wrong about Edward.
  
  
• Acknowledge that Edward has, at best, not handled this well.
  
  
• Do not make Arthur sound dismissive.
  
  
• Do not make it sound like Arthur is putting any blame on Tedd.

Those were the guidelines I was attempting to adhere to, and it took a LOT of small edits here and there to get to where it wound up. I'm sure opinions will vary on how well Arthur did, but the important thing to remember is that any and all criticism is to be directed AT ARTHUR.

Naturally, if there is to be praise, I will happily accept it, but any complaints should obviously be directed at Arthur.

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- Thursday EGSNP